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Berserk - 25 Jun 2003 10:16 pm
Post subject: The Holy Knight Asheron (Chapter 1 pt 1)
well i kind of rushed this part becuase i wanted get to the part where I know what I'm going to write, well hopefully a few of you will comment on it so I know what type of changes I should make in the next few chapters. well anyway a hint is Asheron's mood is completly going to change after a big event


Chapter 1 pt 1

In a time were Darkness overcomes all that is good, A age of depair, weakness, death, uncertainty, one man has his fate change from good to bad. He is the Holy Knight known as Asheron. He will try to overcome
the darkness the of the world, the world he knew no longer exists in this unceasing place taken over by God. The only thing pressing him forward is the revenge he seeks upon the kingdom and God himself.

[one after noon at at house]

Asheron: This damn battle is going to be a blood bath if the king doesn't send his guards in.

Fiona: I'm just happy to have you here

Ash: I don't care if . . . .

Fiona: If anything was to happen to you I don't know what I would do.

[knock on the door]

Messanger: Asheron there is a asassin, the prince has been killed, you must go to the castle where the sire is waiting for your protection.

Ash: I'll be right back Fiona, lock the doors and don't go anywhere.

[at the castle]

King Juitin: your saying I have to make a sacrifice so my Kingdom will not fall

Unknown: all you have to do is your part.
[disapears]

[Asheron enters]

Ash: Sire is everything alright

[They both hear screams from the next room over]

Ash: hasn't anyone else of the Holy Knights come sire ?

Juitin: if only they weren't at the battle field

Ash: why wasn't I told of this, I AM THERE COMMANDER !!!!

[banging on the door, the door crashes down]
[5 asassins enter]

Ash (to himself) : what is going on here, why wouldn't he tell me of this matter

asassins: we have come to kill you Lord Juitin.

Ash (to himself): something doesn't seem quite right here the king seems to be in a calm state even though the group of assasins stand right infront of him

[asassins rush at Asheron and they all draw there swords]

assasin leader: there is only one we can take him easily, all attack at once

Ash: you really think I'll be that easy, I will not go down until everyone of you are dead !!!!!!

[swords clash]
[Ash hits the first asassin to come close to him and repells the next strike]

asassin leader: I TOLD YOU ALL TO ATTACK AT THE SAME TIME NOW GO !!!!

[all rush towards Ash]
[Ash takes down the first 2 but gets struck by the 3 on his wrist]

asassin: boss i got him he won't be able to hold onto his sword anymore with that wound.

Ash: heh

asassin boss: look behind you, you fool never underestimate youropponent

[asassins head roles infront of there leader]

asassin boss: looks like I'm going to have to take care of you, don't think I'll be as easy as the rest of those idiots

[assasin boss takes out a mace about 3X the regulare size of one]
[asassin hits Ash in his right leg]
[Ash falls to one knee]

Ash (to himself) : maybe I shouldn't be so easy on this guy

[the Kings soldiers show up to help Asheron]

Juitin: what are you doing you fools !!!


[asassin boss takes down 5 of the kings soldiers in one swing of his mace]
[Ash forces himself back on his feet]

Ash: stop he is to good for you guys, step down,
i will be the one to finish this.

Asassin boss: you still think you can beat with those wounds you have, ha you must be crazy.

[ash rushes toward the asassin boss jumps over his attack and slashs his sword at him]

Ash: What I missed

Asassin: you are a formidable opponent, why don't you join with us, and you will never have to suffer.

Ash: never, you will face the same outcome as those who have died before you

[Ash now grips the sword at goes to attack]
[Asassin starts to whip his mace at Ash but every attack is blocked]

Ash: this is the end !!

[Ash once again leeps over his attack only to be block once more]
[Ash throws a dagger toward the asassin, and the asassin falls to the ground]

Asassin: well . . . . it looks like this is my last chance
[asassin grabs the dagger out of his chest and throws it at Ash with his last breath]
[asassin boss dies]
[Ash is hit in the back and falls to the ground and faints]

Juitin: why did this have to happen now, he will come back, my kingdom,
what will happen to my kingdom.

END OF part 1
Sledgstone - 26 Jun 2003 10:26 pm
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let me know when part two is up. i want to read them both at the same time.. i wish i had more time to read. :\
wolflord - 03 Jul 2003 01:37 am
Post subject: Re: The Holy Knight Asheron (Chapter 1 pt 1)
Berserk wrote:
well i kind of rushed this part becuase i wanted get to the part where I know what I'm going to write, well hopefully a few of you will comment on it so I know what type of changes I should make in the next few chapters. well anyway a hint is Asheron's mood is completly going to change after a big event


Chapter 1 pt 1

In a time were Darkness overcomes all that is good, A age of depair, weakness, death, uncertainty, one man has his fate change from good to bad. He is the Holy Knight known as Asheron. He will try to overcome
the darkness the of the world, the world he knew no longer exists in this unceasing place taken over by God. The only thing pressing him forward is the revenge he seeks upon the kingdom and God himself.

[one after noon at at house]

Asheron: This damn battle is going to be a blood bath if the king doesn't send his guards in.

Fiona: I'm just happy to have you here

Ash: I don't care if . . . .

Fiona: If anything was to happen to you I don't know what I would do.

[knock on the door]

Messanger: Asheron there is a asassin, the prince has been killed, you must go to the castle where the sire is waiting for your protection.

Ash: I'll be right back Fiona, lock the doors and don't go anywhere.

[at the castle]

King Juitin: your saying I have to make a sacrifice so my Kingdom will not fall

Unknown: all you have to do is your part.
[disapears]

[Asheron enters]

Ash: Sire is everything alright

[They both hear screams from the next room over]

Ash: hasn't anyone else of the Holy Knights come sire ?

Juitin: if only they weren't at the battle field

Ash: why wasn't I told of this, I AM THERE COMMANDER !!!!

[banging on the door, the door crashes down]
[5 asassins enter]

Ash (to himself) : what is going on here, why wouldn't he tell me of this matter

asassins: we have come to kill you Lord Juitin.

Ash (to himself): something doesn't seem quite right here the king seems to be in a calm state even though the group of assasins stand right infront of him

[asassins rush at Asheron and they all draw there swords]

assasin leader: there is only one we can take him easily, all attack at once

Ash: you really think I'll be that easy, I will not go down until everyone of you are dead !!!!!!

[swords clash]
[Ash hits the first asassin to come close to him and repells the next strike]

asassin leader: I TOLD YOU ALL TO ATTACK AT THE SAME TIME NOW GO !!!!

[all rush towards Ash]
[Ash takes down the first 2 but gets struck by the 3 on his wrist]

asassin: boss i got him he won't be able to hold onto his sword anymore with that wound.

Ash: heh

asassin boss: look behind you, you fool never underestimate youropponent

[asassins head roles infront of there leader]

asassin boss: looks like I'm going to have to take care of you, don't think I'll be as easy as the rest of those idiots

[assasin boss takes out a mace about 3X the regulare size of one]
[asassin hits Ash in his right leg]
[Ash falls to one knee]

Ash (to himself) : maybe I shouldn't be so easy on this guy

[the Kings soldiers show up to help Asheron]

Juitin: what are you doing you fools !!!


[asassin boss takes down 5 of the kings soldiers in one swing of his mace]
[Ash forces himself back on his feet]

Ash: stop he is to good for you guys, step down,
i will be the one to finish this.

Asassin boss: you still think you can beat with those wounds you have, ha you must be crazy.

[ash rushes toward the asassin boss jumps over his attack and slashs his sword at him]

Ash: What I missed

Asassin: you are a formidable opponent, why don't you join with us, and you will never have to suffer.

Ash: never, you will face the same outcome as those who have died before you

[Ash now grips the sword at goes to attack]
[Asassin starts to whip his mace at Ash but every attack is blocked]

Ash: this is the end !!

[Ash once again leeps over his attack only to be block once more]
[Ash throws a dagger toward the asassin, and the asassin falls to the ground]

Asassin: well . . . . it looks like this is my last chance
[asassin grabs the dagger out of his chest and throws it at Ash with his last breath]
[asassin boss dies]
[Ash is hit in the back and falls to the ground and faints]

Juitin: why did this have to happen now, he will come back, my kingdom,
what will happen to my kingdom.

END OF part 1
great great, but there are some spelling mistakes. This is the correct version.

Chapter 1 pt 1

In a time were Darkness overcomes all that is good, An age of depair, weakness, death, uncertainty, one man has his fate change from good to bad. He is the Holy Knight known as Asheron. He will try to overcome
the darkness of the world, the world he knew no longer exists in this unceasing place taken over by God. The only thing pressing him forward is the revenge he seeks upon the kingdom and God himself.

[one after noon at Asheron's house]

Asheron: This damn battle is going to be a blood bath if the king doesn't send his guards in.

Fiona: I'm just happy to have you here

Ash: I don't care if . . . .

Fiona: If anything was to happen to you I don't know what I would do.

[knock on the door]

Messenger: Asheron there is an asassin, the prince has been killed, you must go to the castle where the sire is waiting for your protection.

Ash: I'll be right back Fiona, lock the doors and don't go anywhere.

[at the castle]

King Juitin: your saying I have to make a sacrifice so my Kingdom will not fall

Unknown: all you have to do is your part.
[disapears]

[Asheron enters]

Ash: Sire is everything alright

[They both hear screams from the next room over]

Ash: hasn't anyone else of the Holy Knights come sire ?

Juitin: if only they weren't at the battle field

Ash: why wasn't I told of this, I AM THEIR COMMANDER !!!!

[banging on the door, the door crashes down]
[5 asassins enter]

Ash (to himself) : what is going on here, why wouldn't he tell me of this matter

asassins: we have come to kill you Lord Juitin.

Ash (to himself): something doesn't seem quite right here the king seems to be in a calm state even though the group of assasins stand right in front of him

[asassins rush at Asheron and they all draw there swords]

assasin leader: there is only one we can take him easily, all attack at once

Ash: you really think I'll be that easy, I will not go down until everyone of you are dead !!!!!!

[swords clash]
[Ash hits the first asassin to come close to him and repells the next strike]

asassin leader: I TOLD YOU ALL TO ATTACK AT THE SAME TIME NOW GO !!!!

[all rush towards Ash]
[Ash takes down the first 2 but gets struck by the 3 on his wrist]

asassin: boss i got him he won't be able to hold onto his sword anymore with that wound.

Ash: heh

asassin boss: look behind you, you fool never underestimate youropponent

[asassins head roles infront of there leader]

asassin boss: looks like I'm going to have to take care of you, don't think I'll be as easy as the rest of those idiots

[assasin boss takes out a mace about 3X the regulare size of one]
[asassin hits Ash in his right leg]
[Ash falls to one knee]

Ash (to himself) : maybe I shouldn't be so easy on this guy

[the Kings soldiers show up to help Asheron]

Juitin: what are you doing you fools !!!


[asassin boss takes down 5 of the kings soldiers in one swing of his mace]
[Ash forces himself back on his feet]

Ash: stop he is to good for you guys, step down,
i will be the one to finish this.

Asassin boss: you still think you can beat with those wounds you have, ha you must be crazy.

[ash rushes toward the asassin boss jumps over his attack and slashs his sword at him]

Ash: What I missed

Asassin: you are a formidable opponent, why don't you join with us, and you will never have to suffer.

Ash: never, you will face the same outcome as those who have died before you

[Ash now grips the sword at goes to attack]
[Asassin starts to whip his mace at Ash but every attack is blocked]

Ash: this is the end !!

[Ash once again leeps over his attack only to be block once more]
[Ash throws a dagger toward the asassin, and the asassin falls to the ground]

Asassin: well . . . . it looks like this is my last chance
[asassin grabs the dagger out of his chest and throws it at Ash with his last breath]
[asassin boss dies]
[Ash is hit in the back and falls to the ground and faints]

Juitin: why did this have to happen now, he will come back, my kingdom,
what will happen to my kingdom.




I think that's it. Other then that.
Berserk - 06 Jul 2003 10:18 pm
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ya i know I can't spell I don't know how i ever graduated high school bangheadx.gif
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