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Wonderland
Archive 2 - Cecil and Cecille
Saiel - 09 Mar 2003 08:52 pm
Post subject: Cecil and Cecille
(As most people have been asking me how to pronounce each
name...Cecil=See-sill. Cecille=Says-sill)
(I'd really appreciate some
critiquing, even though it's kinda long~thanks!)
Cecil and Cecille
met in May
The sun shone out
With bright, warm rays
Birds sang with
smiling hearts
June was filled with Summer's scent
Cecil and Cecille
played their games
Days came, Days went
While birds built nests with
patient hope
Sultry July made sweat gush forth
Clothes were scarce
Cecil and Cecille's words were short
Birds breathed out a lusty tune
The moon in August grew like mad
Lit up the night
Orange hues
danced with red
Cecil and Cecille felt they could fly
Cecil and
Cecille thought September strange
All dressed in browns
While warm winds
came
Birds nestled to bed in pairs
October's blush released its sigh
Cecil and Cecille quit their games
True feelings shone with greater
light
The birds were packing Summer's score
An odd new scent
November brought
Perfume of flowers
Cecil and Cecille whiffed it out
Birds arranged their parting scene
December's icy wind chilled
hearts
Revealed the truth
Love poisoned before its start
Cecil and
Cecille squabbling incessant
Cecil and Cecille's January stung
Their
lips spat dry
Long-held caresses undone
Birds were nowhere in sight
Trapped in February's frozen embrace
Cecil and Cecille lost their
minds
Between them fire consumed love's space
Their bird sat, cooing in
the dark
The Ides of March--an ironic date
Accusations never-ending
Cecil and Cecille knew each other's fate
Birds returned with battered
wings
April's scent was less than Spring
But more than mold
Lovers controlled by a fling
Cecil and Cecille intrigued the worms
Cecil and Cecille met in May
On this spot
Or so they say
The
birds have used them both and flown away.
Heir of Silence - 09 Mar 2003 09:09 pm
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Obviously no offense intended, but my first thought is '...what the hell?' 
Interesting,
and of intriguing thought.....I'd feel better if you'd explain it to me, though
Aroura - 09 Mar 2003 09:36 pm
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Sweet! I love it!
Wonderful way to write a poem. it sort of reminds me of 'ickleme pickleme
tickleme too'.
Azrael - 09 Mar 2003 09:43 pm
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I got it! Yay! 
Good poem.
Saiel - 09 Mar 2003 09:43 pm
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| Heir of Silence wrote: |
Obviously no offense intended, but my first thought is
'...what the hell?'
Interesting, and of intriguing thought.....I'd feel
better if you'd explain it to me, though |
Hmmm...well, no
offense taken, but I'll try to explain...whatever needs to be explained...
So it's basically split into groups of three months...May,
June, and July are the two meeting and just kinda hanging out and
flirting...August, September, and October are them falling in love. November,
December, and January--they start to get suspicious of each other (the flower
perfume being from another girl,) and then February, March, and April they've
just given up and plan to...off each other.
The fourth line of each
stanza has the birds just representing what's going on in their relationship at
the time. The very last line...well, to be blunt, after they killed each other,
the birds ate up all evidence that they'd ever even existed.
I think
that's all I've got to explain...if not, just say so. ^^
And thank you,
Aroura. 
Edit: And thanks, Azzie, too!
PitViper33 - 11 Mar 2003 03:02 pm
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Your poetic style seems to be changing....
I really like it.
Anime Pimp - 12 Mar 2003 09:56 pm
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I love it.
Saiel - 12 Mar 2003 10:00 pm
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| PitViper33 wrote: |
Your poetic style seems to be changing....
I really
like it. |
Like the
poem...or the change? 'Cause one of those isn't particularly nice...
But
thank you all the same. ^^;;
| Anime Pimp wrote: |
| I love it. |
Thankies.
Heir of Silence - 12 Mar 2003 11:18 pm
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I really do like it
Do the birds have any symbolism, though? I hate to
become a nuisance, but I dunno
PitViper33 - 12 Mar 2003 11:40 pm
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| Saiel wrote: |
| PitViper33 wrote: |
Your poetic style seems to be changing....
I
really like it. |
Like
the poem...or the change? 'Cause one of those isn't particularly
nice...
But thank you all the same. ^^;;
|
I like the
poem. Does that mean that I like the change? I don't really know. I was just
acknowledging it.
Saiel - 15 Mar 2003 02:24 pm
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| Heir of Silence wrote: |
I really do like it
Do the birds have any
symbolism, though? I hate to become a nuisance, but I
dunno |
Hmmm...well,
it's sort of just like, the birds' actions are reflecting the two's relationship
at the time...or Cecil and Cecille's bird-like actions are. I can't really think
of any *deep* way to put it... Dunno if that's a bad
thing...though for the most part, the birds are representing the happiness of
their relationship, until they come back and are changed, the way the
realtionship has...uhm...I suck at explanations. ~_~;;
Ladywriter - 16 Mar 2003 01:31 pm
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i like it the way it is n i think is sweet
Saiel - 16 Mar 2003 01:37 pm
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| Ladywriter wrote: |
| i like it the way it is n i think is
sweet |
Thank you!
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