Wonderland
Archive 2 - Please Heir of Silence - 03 Mar 2003 09:23 pm Post subject: Please
My will simply bleeds away I no longer want to be No more reason for me
to stay there's nothing left for me
Pale skin and crimson floor
Smiling my last, weakened grin No more energy any more Succumbing to
the fight within
Now I've taken my last breath it's not your fault,
please don't cry But as you watch my wanton death Please....just let me
die
Amadeus - 03 Mar 2003 09:25 pm Post subject:
Wow,just the thing to cheer you up in the morning!
It's good though; I
like the rhyme scheme
COBRA - 03 Mar 2003 09:45 pm Post subject:
It's good, kind of gives a dose of reality to what some people feel at they're
own death! Im not sure if thats a good or a bad thing I guess depending how you
look at it
Heir of Silence - 03 Mar 2003 10:02 pm Post subject:
It's a very unrealistic portrayal of how people feel at their own death sandrock - 03 Mar 2003 10:44 pm Post subject:
that's good Eli - 03 Mar 2003 10:51 pm Post subject:
very good Heir of Silence - 03 Mar 2003 11:19 pm Post subject:
Thank you
Fate - 10 Mar 2003 05:25 pm Post subject:
I like it Azrael - 10 Mar 2003 11:00 pm Post subject:
Cool.
Now how did I miss this. Heir of Silence - 11 Mar 2003 12:04 am Post subject:
Cognitive distortion, I suppose
Allie - 23 Mar 2003 04:22 am Post subject:
ooooo i love it ^_^
Akira13 - 23 Mar 2003 09:51 am Post subject:
very good, bit sad though
