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Fate - 10 Mar 2003 06:16 pm
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Ok this is the first Poem I've posted here so please be nice icon7.gif

Saddened

Inside a tiny garden,
Past a stand of trees...

I looked into a silent pool,
And in the reflection, I did see –
Calm, silent eyes,
Frizzed brown hair,
Tight, full lips –
A face.
My face.
Stared back at me…

What drew me in though, were the eyes,
And what lay behind, their vacancy…
Pain filled past,
Quiet tears,
Silent screams –
A soul.
My soul.
Stared back at me…

Altered beyond all recognition,
What was once, now, can never be…
Trusting innocence,
Unguarded smiles,
A gentle spirit –
A past.
My past.
Stared back at me…

Freeing my gaze, with a saddened sigh,
I continued on, with heavy heart
Through the darkness of the day
Emotions torn apart…
Eli - 10 Mar 2003 06:40 pm
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very nice!!! icon2.gif i like the feeling and depth it has.
Saiel - 10 Mar 2003 07:50 pm
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I like it! It flows beautifully~ happy.gif
Fate - 10 Mar 2003 08:01 pm
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thank cu! happy.gif
Strider Hiryu - 10 Mar 2003 10:10 pm
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That was very well done. Good job Fate.
Aroura - 12 Mar 2003 03:19 pm
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*claps* very well done n.n
Total Trinity - 13 Mar 2003 09:21 am
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Very well done, indeed. I think that you are very talented, Fate. Why don't you post more often?

~Total Trinity~
Fate - 13 Mar 2003 10:12 pm
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'cause out iof the few poems that I've done this
is the only one I really liked... sweatdrop.gif
Total Trinity - 15 Mar 2003 03:24 pm
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Fate wrote:
'cause out iof the few poems that I've done this
is the only one I really liked... sweatdrop.gif


Well I don't like alot of the poetry that I write but I post it to get others opinion. Most of the time, when someone does something, they don't like the job they did so they need to get other's opinions in order to find out if it truly is worth while, which this one really is.

~Total Trinity~
Guyver - 05 Apr 2003 05:00 pm
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i like this poem, kida gave me good visulisation of it
Noin - 08 Apr 2003 01:27 pm
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that was some really detailed stuff. i like it a lot.
you should post more often. icon2.gif

Filipino_Monk - 08 Apr 2003 03:36 pm
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Why can't I write cool stuff like that? Or in that case write at all sweatdrop.gif

That was really good though icon21.gifhappy.gificon21.gif
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