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Wonderland
Archive 2 - Loving Razor Anime Pimp - 09 Mar 2003 02:07 pm Post subject: Loving Razor Loving Razor Slowly, I raise the sharpened blade to the blemished skin I've made. As the blade cuts my skin, I'll fade; fade away in a sea of pain. When I bleed there's a rush of bliss, taking me to a place I've missed. There will be no remorse for this; my prayers are not in vain. This drug inches slowly down and continues forth without a sound. It once subdued this ornate frown but now can scarcely keep me sane. This is my only escape; my empty dreams will soon take shape. It saves me from my fate that looms, uncertain doom; it will not wane. So, again I pay my fees; I cry and fall down to my knees. Bleed with me, or let me be. I await my pain. -- another in an unfortunate series of depressing poetry. It still needs work, methinks. Ladywriter - 09 Mar 2003 02:39 pm Post subject: in happen to like suicide poetry. Aroura - 09 Mar 2003 07:49 pm Post subject: Really good, very well writen, but so sad ;.; Saiel - 09 Mar 2003 08:36 pm Post subject: Very nicely done...I love the 'Bleed with me, or let me be' line. Fate - 10 Mar 2003 05:23 pm Post subject: very well written... I especially like stanza's 2 and 3 I think its stanza 4 that needs rearanging or something.... but even if you don't change it, its still a beautifully, sad poem Anime Pimp - 12 Mar 2003 09:55 pm Post subject: I didn't follow the rhyme scheme in that stanza. I'm not quite sure why, actually. =\ Umm, thanks for the compliments. Total Trinity - 13 Mar 2003 09:17 am Post subject: Pimp, that was one of the most depressing poems that I have ever read and... I really liked it! ~Total Trinity~ Azrael - 13 Mar 2003 10:13 pm Post subject: Dark. Anime Pimp - 13 Mar 2003 10:22 pm Post subject: Word. You guys are nice. Allie - 13 Mar 2003 11:07 pm Post subject: !!!!!1 OOOOOOO me like me like!!! ehehe *bows* sorry! im just a BIIIG fan of depressing poetry!! Total Trinity - 15 Mar 2003 03:28 pm Post subject:
You're weird, but I like it. ~Total Trinity~ darkangleofdeath - 04 May 2003 04:58 pm Post subject: dude word extream deep man
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