Wonderland
Archive 2 - *shrugs* Saiel - 09 Apr 2003 09:16 pm Post subject: *shrugs*
(Sometimes when I don't feel like going to bed, I stay up and write...but that
doesn't mean I write anything really good...^^; I did this the other night out
of boredom, just for fun. I want a better word than 'rubber' in that second to
last line, though.)
The rubberband SNAPS Flying outside
A guilty hand SMACKS A counter- The stinging subsides
Puzzle-filled faces MOAN At the sight Your writhing plump tongue
GAGS On rubber Stopped dead in its flight
PitViper33 - 09 Apr 2003 09:41 pm Post subject:
Go ahead. Call me dumb. But I don't get the smack part. I do think it's
kinda neat though. I sure wish I could just 'whip something up' like that.
Eli - 09 Apr 2003 10:58 pm Post subject:
lol its good saiel..it leaves you thinking just what the heck happened hehe
dark_templer_102 - 09 Apr 2003 11:51 pm Post subject:
i wish i oculd write this good well i think its great Noin - 10 Apr 2003 02:33 am Post subject: beautiful.. you need like a black beret and a striped french
t-shirt. with some like jazz music playing in a club while you say that.
Eli - 10 Apr 2003 04:03 am Post subject:
lol coffee shop Noin
Noin - 10 Apr 2003 03:04 pm Post subject: yeah... just wherever there's an ambient mood followed by the
sounds of snapping fingers to go in rhythm with each said line.
*puts on retro shades*
groovy. Aroura - 10 Apr 2003 07:10 pm Post subject: Hehe, free verse. Fun
stuff Anime Pimp - 14 Apr 2003 06:51 pm Post subject:
Fun. darkangleofdeath - 04 May 2003 04:53 pm Post subject:
cool
Total Trinity - 05 May 2003 08:26 am Post subject:
Schway!
well i think its great 
