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Wonderland Archive 2 - dreamer

darkangleofdeath - 26 Apr 2003 02:17 pm
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your eyes are like the stars above,
you may be the only one i truly love,
as the clouds in the sky go by & time flys,

i can only emagine another place,
wher i can always see your face,
&where our love is bound & may only here
true love can be spoken but never broken
darkangleofdeath - 04 May 2003 04:25 pm
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sorry cant spell worth shit
darkangleofdeath - 10 May 2003 03:36 pm
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hey im not that bad am i?
Kaede - 10 May 2003 11:12 pm
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in terms of the poem or the spelling?
Saiel - 12 May 2003 11:10 pm
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Total Trinity wrote:
Check you spelling.



Irony
Makes me
Smile


Anyhoo, the rhyme scheme confuses me...but I think it has 'good poem' potential...especially since the 2nd verse improves upon the 1st, in my opinion. So if that continued...well, then damn. icon_smile2.gif
darkangleofdeath - 09 Jun 2003 06:05 pm
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ouch that hurts 3ddisgust3.gif
Saiel - 09 Jun 2003 08:08 pm
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Sorry...personal opinion. And I never want people to just tell me they like my work if they really could be giving helpful criticism. :\
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