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Wonderland
Archive - a poem
Allie - 18 Nov 2002 03:50 pm
Post subject: a poem
erm..well i kinda changed a word in this poem..but ill post the original..
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I feel so abused by your touch,
that you assume this is not
such.
A faint memory in my mind,
is all that you may find.
Let me
tell oyu something,
my love is more than nothing.
But to my my heart in
your hands,
is like to find a precious shel in the sands~~~~
REVISED!
I feel so soothed by your touch,
that you assume
this is not such.
A faint image in my mind,
is all that you wil find.
Let me tell you something,
my love is more than nothing.
But to put
my heart in your open hands,
is like a precious shell in the sands.
okay which one do you guys think is better.....personal
opinion!!
Amadeus - 18 Nov 2002 04:01 pm
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I prefer the second best, but that depends on how one goes about interpreting
the poem I guess.
Either way, both are good.
Allie - 18 Nov 2002 07:38 pm
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you are like the only person who has interpreted it the way it was supposed
to...thanks ^_^
Guyver - 19 Nov 2002 10:48 am
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i kinda liked the top 1 
Azrael - 19 Nov 2002 11:03 am
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Well, the one word kinda changes the meaning of it, so...I guess it just depends
on the tone you want. They're about equal in my eyes.
td yuy - 26 Nov 2002 10:02 am
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i like da first one,i have a thing for abuse 
anyway,both poems are really
nice 
Amadeus - 26 Nov 2002 01:21 pm
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It's amazing how just changing a couple of words can virtually completely change
the meaning of a poem
Total Trinity - 20 Jan 2003 05:35 pm
Post subject: I like #2
I like the first one. But I guess it all depends on your mood at the time.
Like, normally I would like the second one but I'm ina bad  mood right now.
NEway, They are
both good.
Fate - 21 Jan 2003 04:06 pm
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Personally I like the 2nd one
I guess I can relate to it better 
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