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Wonderland Archive 2 - With Fate

Saiel - 09 Sep 2003 11:57 pm
Post subject: With Fate
(First college writing assignment. A poem, taking an abstract idea such as Death, the Soul, etc, and personifying it.)



Underlined eyes with shadows as pens
Deaden the glint,
Throbbing shine,
Of esoteric beginnings.

Harlequin’s sneer drumming incessant
Raises a brow,
Arched to a point,
Pause…for dramatic effect.

Four-membered fist massaging the chamber
Coerced into black,
Echoes a thunk,
Singular exit locked with the lever.

Fingernail pinprick chilling the neck
Sweat frozen stiff,
Timid eyes bat,
Flesh melds with steel—recoils back.

Ragged teeth winking through sounds unheard
Lips retching acid,
Loses all reason,
Curtain of eyelids---escape from the world.

Trigger to shaft, an eternity’s scream
Whirring for hours,
Releasing for days,
Ring froze to temple as impatience runs free.

Horror upon fantasy, nightmares upon dreams
Hand upon fist,
Flash upon dark,
Gloved finger pointing which life is to be.

Speck of a smile beneath a blank mask
Unclasping clenched knuckles,
Retreating false promises,
Saving her bullet for another forked path.
DeathscytheX - 10 Sep 2003 12:13 am
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ooooh its good ^_^
PitViper33 - 10 Sep 2003 01:15 am
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I know what it's about! happy.gif icon_smile2.gif
And I love it!

I still see the line that doesn't fit, miss jill. But like you said, at least it sounds good. icon7.gif
Saiel - 11 Sep 2003 02:36 am
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Thanks, you guys.

My teacher's brief words today were, 'Nice economy...I'll explain what that is next time.' Though I know what it is...and it's a nice compliment, I suppose. icon_smile2.gif
Ladywriter - 13 Sep 2003 04:10 pm
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he better appreciate you! >.<
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