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Saiel - 22 Jan 2003 07:00 pm
Post subject: Bus Stop
~I wrote this with restrictions I set on myself. It's not one of my favorites that I've done, but it is the most recent.~


Bus Stop

I meant to ask a question just now
Instead, I let my feelings slip
(Oops.)

Maybe if you didn't annoy me so much
I'd keep my mouth shut more
(Ouch.)

I don't need you--that was a joke
Instead, I need a little break
(Really.)

Maybe you should stop crying now, little boy
I'd like a dry shirt later
(But.)

I wasn't trying to hurt you, ya know
Instead of how it seems now
(Um.)

Maybe I should just get it over with
I'd be better off that way
(Sure.)

I thank you for being my boyfriend's understudy
Instead of running away in terror
(Whatever.)

Maybe everything will go smoothly now, after this
I'd hate to dirty my hands
(Help?)

I suppose we should part ways about now
Instead of us becoming all chummy
(Alleluia.)

Maybe we'll meet again after I've done it
I'd hate to leave you hanging
(Weirdo.)




~So, the restrictions were...8 words to each first line, 6 words to each second, and 1 word to the third. The odd stanzas first line begin with I and the second line with Instead...the even stanzas first line begin with Maybe and second with I'd. Tell me what you think.~
Heir of Silence - 22 Jan 2003 08:35 pm
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I'm moderately befuddled icon9.gif
Saiel - 22 Jan 2003 08:37 pm
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Yay! happy.gif

That seems to be the consensus conclusion so far. icon_neutral.gif
Aroura - 23 Jan 2003 07:50 pm
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I like the way it's writen, very interesting n.n
Total Trinity - 28 Jan 2003 11:28 am
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I agree, Aroura. I too like the way it is written.

~Totla Trinity~



---I am no longer worthy of love. icon15.gif
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